Hello folks,

As you may remember i am doing an MA in automotive journalism at the moment. Just been doing an exercise, 600 word car review...so obviously i chose the furby! I tried not to be too biased, but anyway...it would be good to see what you think of one of my first efforts. Its not being published or anything, i'm going to be writing a lot of practice articles over the next year Bear in mind its written as if the car was a new model.

FABIA VRS

Fast and frugal, cheap and yet high quality, the Fabia Vrs is a car of extremes. The red hatchback, parked outside the office, is slowly cooling after 50 rapid motorway and b-road miles. Sit down into the sports seat and you will see 50mpg proudly displayed on the trip computer. For once I can have my cake, and eat it.

Skoda has shoehorned a 1.9 l turbo diesel engine under the bonnet, which makes for an interesting proposition. Yes, this is a common engine used in many a Volkswagen, Seat and Audi, but for once it has been allowed to sing in its 130bhp form. Imagine for a moment all the times you have seen an Audi A4 or even A6 with 1.9TD emblazoned on its derri

I think that's pretty good and unbiassed (for a Skoda forum )

Drop the comma after 'The red hatchback'.

That aside it's good.

Edit: And the next comma too - they're unnecessary and spoil the flow of the sentence.

2nd Edit:

It's not perfiect without - maybe say 'The red hatchback, currently cooling outside the office, ...'

Nice & simple. I like

Edit: And another thing, the 2.0 does 30-50mph in 3.35 secs, believe it or not

But really, a very nice article. I think you'll do excellently with your course.

Super review, very professional and I enjoyed reading it

Thanks very much for the nice comments guys!

I know what you mean about the comma, i tend to make sentences overly complicated sometimes

cheers

Nice read but paragraphs would make it easier to read if your keeping that formating.

Excellent review! Couldn't have sung the Fabia VRS's praises any better myself

Good read.

Reads well, although I'm not sure I agree with your statement of "truly the first diesel hot hatch". Everyone on here states that it's not a hot hatch, but a warm/lukewarm hatch and also don't forget that the Peugoet 306 and Golf GTD may predate the Fabia by a couple of years

Chris

Reads well' date=' although I'm not sure I agree with your statement of "truly the first diesel hot hatch". Everyone on here states that it's not a hot hatch, but a warm/lukewarm hatch and also don't forget that the Peugoet 306 and Golf GTD may predate the Fabia by a couple of years

Chris[/quote']

It's the first exclusive diesel hot hatch, there's no petrol version.

It may not be classed as a hot hatch but in article terms it's better than saying 'warm/lukewarm hatch', doesn't quite have the same ring about it

Did the model you tested not have pikey mods?

It may not be classed as a hot hatch but in article terms it's better than saying 'warm/lukewarm hatch', doesn't quite have the same ring about it

I would have said sporty diesel rather than hot-hatch, purely because it doesn't have the grunt or handling of other hot hatches "in its class".

Chris

It's the first exclusive diesel hot hatch' date=' there's no petrol version.

It may not be classed as a hot hatch but in article terms it's better than saying 'warm/lukewarm hatch', doesn't quite have the same ring about it[/quote']

Purley talking about its acceleration, it IS a hot hatch. Depends how you define 'Hot' really.